
“Vanessa, I am really sorry about your grandpa.” Allison said. “At least he died from old age and not a slow, painful death from an illness,” Carry said. Vanessa had a tear run down her cheek. Allison slapped Carry on her thigh. “Why did you say that? It made her more upset.” Allison fumed. Carry shrugged. “Guys, it’s fine. I’m just going to go for a little walk to try to take my mind off of him.” Vanessa hopped off the wooden bench and ran down the grass covered hill. She took a nice walk around the ball field and thought about how she was going to get through her science test she had later that day when she hadn't even studied. “Ugh, I’m dead meat.” Vanessa said to herself. “Ouch! Stop it! Get off of me!! Let me go!! Please!” cried a strange voice that Vanessa did not recognize. “What was that?” she thought to herself as she ran towards the voice. It was coming from door 4. Vanessa tip toed over toward the noise. Her heart thundered in her chest as she watched a man she didn't recognize hover over a boy. “Ouch stop! Get off!!! I’ll do anything! Just stop!” screamed the boy. “Where was everyone? How come no one could hear the cries of this boy?” Vanessa thought to herself. The man mumbled something to his captive, but I couldn’t understand him from where I stood. “Vanessa? Who’s Vanessa? I can’t do that!!! HELP! SOMEONE PLEASE HELP!” the boy cried out. I gasped and covered my mouth in disbelief just as the man plunged his dagger directly into the boys chest. The boy slumped lifelessly to the ground, blood pouring from his chest, painting the concrete around him scarlet. I could no longer hold my own fear or my own pain inside myself. I whimpered. The murderer slowly turned his head toward me. I tried to run but it felt like my feet were nailed to the ground. The man walked closer and closer until we were nose to nose.
To be continued
6 comments:
Very funny sounds:Ouch Ugh Let me go!! Please oo a oo a HELP! SOMEONE PLEASE HELP
Wow. That was really good. What I suspect is that that man killed her grandpa. But you are the writer! Did the man kill the boy? I want to read chapter two!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I have two words for you...WRITE MORE! I can't wait for the rest of the story. It kind of gave goosebumps too. Wow that's a good plot.
Wow Larry 8,
That is a very suspenceful story! I can't wait to hear the rest.
pupylvr916
write faster
I want to know now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it! I can't wait to read more!
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